Fangala the Flying Feline

Very nice. I actually felt the exhilaration of free-falling while reading this. Some of the lines could be stronger (like Kalliope pointed out), but other than that, this was extremely ...

Muchas gracias! Wow, I wasn't expecting reviews like that. This was a spontaneous post, but nonetheless, thank you, thank you!

This is told by a cat. I used to dance like a gypsy queen-- raven hair and eyes of green. The harder I danced, the brighter the sun. That was ...

I want to respond to this because I'm a girl. Overall, good job. Words like "freaking" and "crap" are probably what saved this. But Gwen (I think it was Gwen) ...

ew that is so gross u and ayra both r bad writers. sorry but this isnt good. Thank you, 4uiwouldie, for that tasteless and insulting comment. Number one, you have ...

Okay. Well, sorry to say, but this has A LOT of grammar problems. I won't point them out, but they're just little mistakes; you'll catch them if you read over ...

Bravo, Gwen. Quite nice. I didn't think your title was emo--I actually like it a lot. Blood doesn't always have to represent depression. It's fiery, like passion! So yeah, good ...

Jeannie, Ricci, Laurel, Molly, Diane, Betsy, Claire, Luna.

Oh, wow. This was so...addicting. I couldn't stop reading it, and I'm pretty sure my heart went crazy. Great job with the choppy style--you really pulled it off. Somehow, overusing ...

Ooh, lovely! I like how you start with "so." It's an interesting technique, beginning in the middle instead of the beginning. I think it's very clever how you rhymed "youth" ...

I agree with Ayra; this was sweet. Your first line is especially vivid and gripping. Very profound, too, a metaphor for how fear is self-induced and you can fly out ...

Whoa there, Ida, slow down. First of all, why the HECK did you post chapter two first? offense, but I thought it was common sense to put chapter one first. ...

Hello, canis! By the way, I love your work! So, where would I most like to travel? Well, I just happen to be in Mexico right now! Yup, that's right. ...

Uh... :D

Well, I liked it. I didn't think it was too rough; in fact, the short line breaks pulled me in more, so I think that was a success. I also ...